Text errors

[ThvN]

I'll post up some typos and text errors I found, feel free to add any you come across. I'm not a native English speaker so any help is welcome.

One thing I'm not sure about, a lot of the scenario descriptions (if you select a seperate scenario to play you'll see this text in the menu) are grammatically OK but come across a bit 'wooden', they lack flow. So I've substituted some ideas of my own, but as these are stylistical issues they are not very important, if the scenario designer(s) only want real errors reported, that's fine, just let me know.

Advance to Elbe

AdvancetoElbeB_triumph.pzbrf + AdvancetoElbeC_victory.pzbrf
“ A long road it’s been,”
it has been

IDS_SCEN_NAME
“Advance to Elbe”
Advance to the Elbe

IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“Western Allies are cutting through Germany heading to meet Soviets at Elbe.”
Western Allies cut through Germany to meet the Soviets at the Elbe River.

IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_CAM_OBJECTIVES
“Capture all objectives and avoid conflict with Soviets.”
with the Soviets.

IDS_STRING35
Weissentels=Weissenfels

IDS_STRING39
Nordhousen=Nordhausen

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Allied Disputes

AlliedDisputesB_triumph.pzbrf + AlliedDisputesC_victory.pzbrf
“You’re fought in more theaters and won more battles than even Alexander himself. “
You’ve fought in more theaters and won more battles than even Alexander the Great himself.

AlliedDisputesD_loss.pzbrf
“due to your ineptitude we’re now facing an entirely new conflict.... is it a continuation of World War 2 or is it World War 3??”
due to your ineptitude we’re now facing an entirely new conflict... is it a continuation of World War 2 or is it World War 3?
(three periods, not four, and one question mark, not two)

IDS_MESSAGE0
"Help them fight through.At least one of them needs to survive and reach area marked A."
Help them fight through. At least one of them needs to survive and reach the area marked A.
(there was no space between period and next sentence)

IDS_MESSAGE1
"HQ is sending in rare unit to reinforce your effort. "
sending in a rare unit
(or, stylistically better:) HQ is sending in an experimental unit to reinforce your effort.

IDS_STRING38
Gomina Torzym=Gmina Torzym

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Anzio Landing

AnzioLandingB_triumph.pzbrf
“You are now to proceed to England to prepare for the invasion of Europe!”
the invasion of France!
(since we're already in Italy, which is in Europe, I thought this was confusing)

AnzioLandingC_victory.pzbrf
“Your task now is to proceed to England to prepare for the invasion of Europe!”
the invasion of France!

AnzioLandingD_loss.pzbrf
“Despite this debacle your friends at HQ recommend that you proceed to England to prepare for the invasion of the continent.”
the invasion of France.
(same reasons as above, we're already fighting on the continent)

IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_CAM_OBJECTIVES
“Capture all objectives and kill Leopold railway artillery.”
and destroy Leopold

IDS_STRING44
Astura = Astura River

IDS_STRING46
Moletta = Moletta River

IDS_STRING47
Torto = Torto River

[Razz1]

For Sicily briefing:

I would put a paragraph starting at " The Americans will land on the Left in the Gela area in support."

I was confused by this statement in Beta 1. It implies you will get auxiliary forces on the map that will help you in your invasion.

[praetorreich36]

strike - not stricke.- Tutorial 1940 screen.

[sgocart6298]

If we already posted text errors in the previous Beta(s) do you still want us to report the same text errors found in Beta 3?

Example: Market Garden

1) "...Market Garden is a plan (is) to speed up our advance...."
remove (is)

2) "...relieve the airborne from (to) bridge-to-bridge...."
remove (to) and add hyphens (-)

3) "...If successful(,) this operation...."
insert (,) for pause.

[Razz1]

Re: Allied: Medenine
by paz231 » 17 May 2013 17:42

Glad to see that the Axis air has been downgraded a bit for beta 3; the bf-109 was especially difficult notwithstanding my 3 very experienced (300 plus ) fighters. Re: victory conditions, maybe it is only me, but I find the phrase "prevent the axis army from exiting" to be a bit too general. Does it mean that one escaping unit ruins my Triumph ? Whatever the answer, the player should know it at the outset of the scenario and be able to act according .


Perhaps " prevent any axis army unit from exiting" as if, only one unit escapes, you loose the Triumph.

[ThvN]

OK, everything I post from here is for beta3.

As mentioned above, in the Campaign selection screen, the tutorial's description contains the word 'stricke'. Should be 'strike' of course.

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Advance to Elbe

IDS_SCEN_NAME “Advance to Elbe” = Advance to the Elbe

IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“Western Allies are cutting through Germany heading to meet Soviets at Elbe.”
Western Allies cut through Germany to meet the Soviets at the Elbe River.

IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_CAM_OBJECTIVES
“Capture all objectives and avoid conflict with Soviets.”
Capture all objectives and avoid conflict with the Soviets.
OR:
Capture all objectives and avoid conflicts with Soviets

IDS_STRING35 Weissentels = Weissenfels

IDS_STRING39 Nordhousen = Nordhausen

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Allied Disputes

AlliedDisputesB_triumph.pzbrf + AlliedDisputesC_victory.pzbrf
“You’re fought in more theaters and won more battles than even Alexander himself.“
You’ve fought in more theaters and won more battles than even Alexander the Great himself.

AlliedDisputesD_loss.pzbrf
“due to your ineptitude we’re now facing an entirely new conflict.... is it a continuation of World War 2 or is it World War 3??”
due to your ineptitude we’re now facing an entirely new conflict... is it a continuation of World War 2 or is it World War 3?
(only three periods, and one question mark)

IDS_STRING38 Gomina Torzym = Gmina Torzym

IDS_MESSAGE0
"Polish resistance wants to join our forces! Help them fight through.At least one of them needs to survive and reach area marked A."
through. At (space inserted)
reach the area

IDS_MESSAGE1
"HQ is sending in rare unit to reinforce your effort."
sending in a rare unit
OR:
HQ is sending in an experimental unit to reinforce your effort.

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Anzio Landing

AnzioLandingB_triumph.pzbrf
“You are now to proceed to England to prepare for the invasion of Europe!”
France (note: we're already in Europe)

AnzioLandingC_victory.pzbrf
“Your task now is to proceed to England to prepare for the invasion of Europe!”
France

AnzioLandingD_loss.pzbrf
“Despite this debacle your friends at HQ recommend that you proceed to England to prepare for the invasion of the continent.”
France

IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_CAM_OBJECTIVES
“Capture all objectives and kill Leopold railway artillery.”
destroy

IDS_STRING44 Astura = Astura River

IDS_STRING46 Moletta = Moletta River

IDS_STRING47 Torto = Torto River

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Battle of Girba

BattleofGirbaA.pzbrf
"the key to defeating it is overcoming the Italian armor"
armour

"and so far as we know their armored element"
armoured

"this battle will prove to be the very first armored action"
armoured

(note: armor is American English, armour is British English; there are other examples in some other briefings, but I'll leave it at this and focus on real errors)

IDS_MESSAGE0
"Push up the road there must be more Italian units around."
Push up the road, there must be more Italian units around.

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Berlin West

BerlinWestC_victory.pzbrf
"You’re fought in more theaters and won more battles than even Alexander himself."
You’ve fought in more theaters and won more battles than even Alexander the Great himself.

IDS_MESSAGE0
" Aditional airborne units are available to you."
Additional

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Border Raids

IDS_SCEN_AXIS_CAM_OBJECTIVES + IDS_SCEN_AXIS_SCN_OBJECTIVES
"More than 6 trucks needs to survive."
need

A small observation:

IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_CAM_OBJECTIVES
Kill all 9 trucks from Supply Convoy. Kill at least 3 trucks from Supply Convoy.
IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_SCN_OBJECTIVES
Kill at least 3 trucks from Supply Convoy.

It would be better to replace 'kill' with 'destroy', but it's not technically wrong.

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Cassino Breakthrough

CassinoBreakthroughA.pzbrf
"We’ve battered our heads against it for months; every attack has failed."
butted our heads
OR:
battered our armies

"This time we’ve been able to move far more force into position than the Germans suspect."
forces

"At a minimum you must seize not only Cassino town but the mountain behind it;"
At a minimum you must seize not only the town of Cassino but the mountain behind it as well;

IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
"Allies are breaking the Gustav Line."
Allies are breaking through the Gustav Line.

IDS_STRING39 Pignatro = Pignataro

IDS_STRING47 S. Pietro Infine = San Pietro Infine

IDS_STRING56 Abba di Montecassino = Abbazia di Montecassino (OR:) Montecassino Abbey

IDS_STRING49 Rocca d Evandro = Rocca d’Evandro

IDS_STRING72 von Senger Line = Senger Line

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Crete

Not strictly wrong, but:

IDS_STRING22 Herakleion = Heraklion

IDS_STRING23 Rhethymnon = Rethymnon

Both are very old spellings, which would have been used in WW2 (I've checked the maps for Creforce), but I used the more modern spellings.

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Crossing the Rhine

IDS_STRING25 Siegbourg = Siegburg

IDS_MESSAGE1
"HQ is sending you rare and unique unit."
you a rare
OR:
HQ is sending you an experimental unit.

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Crusader

As Ballacraine mentioned, the correct name for the special truck units is the Royal Army Service Corps (RASC), they are mentioned in the briefing and the pzloc file:

IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_CAM_OBJECTIVES
"Capture and hold 5 objectives and escort 3 units from Service Corps to marked area A."
Capture and hold 5 objectives and escort 3 units from the Royal Army Service Corps to the area marked A.

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D-Day

D-DayC_victory.pzbrf
"The enemy cannot now throw us back into the sea."
The enemy cannot throw us back into the sea anymore.


IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_CAM_OBJECTIVES
"Capture all 4 town objectives and a bridge."
Capture all 4 town objectives and the bridge across the Orne.

IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
"Biggest amphibious invasion that world has seen aimed at liberating France."
Biggest amphibious invasion that the world has seen aimed at liberating France.

Objective fields for the Axis are empty? (IDS_SCEN_AXIS_CAM_OBJECTIVES + IDS_SCEN_AXIS_SCN_OBJECTIVES)

IDS_STRING22 Cherbourgh=Cherbourg

IDS_STRING28 les Pieux=Les Pieux

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Kasserine

IDS_SCEN_AXIS_CAM_OBJECTIVES +
IDS_SCEN_AXIS_SCN_OBJECTIVES +
IDS_SCEN_ALLIED_SCN_OBJECTIVES
Tebesa = Tebessa