Sealion Invasion of England
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...You're going to need them to
Should be too,....
DLC '45 West text errata
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Re: DLC '45 West text errata
Gates of Berlin
...as I fear resuming this war on two fronts can only
come to one conclusion, and German defeat is unacceptable!
better: conclusion - German [or,]
conclusion; German [or,]
conclusion, German
...as I fear resuming this war on two fronts can only
come to one conclusion, and German defeat is unacceptable!
better: conclusion - German [or,]
conclusion; German [or,]
conclusion, German
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Re: DLC '45 West text errata
This is a repost but was it corrected???
Re: DLC '45 West text errata
Postby sgocart6298 » 13 Jan 2013 04:17
Re: DLC '45 West #07: Bastogne Assault
Postby sgocart6298 » 12 Jan 2013 17:09
The Communique to Commander:
Also, Ohh these imprudent Americans.... (unless singing the song, Ohh, Ohh, Ohh. LOL)
Should be: Oh! These imprudent Americans....
Re: DLC '45 West text errata
Postby sgocart6298 » 13 Jan 2013 04:17
Re: DLC '45 West #07: Bastogne Assault
Postby sgocart6298 » 12 Jan 2013 17:09
The Communique to Commander:
Also, Ohh these imprudent Americans.... (unless singing the song, Ohh, Ohh, Ohh. LOL)
Should be: Oh! These imprudent Americans....
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Re: DLC '45 West text errata
Sealion
The War is over
End Note
1) ...without a base of operations anywhere in Europe,....
Should be: operation
2) In this end of World War II,...
Should be: With the end
3) There might even be cool game about it someday!
forgot the [a] There might be a cool game about it someday.
The War is over
End Note
1) ...without a base of operations anywhere in Europe,....
Should be: operation
2) In this end of World War II,...
Should be: With the end
3) There might even be cool game about it someday!
forgot the [a] There might be a cool game about it someday.
Re: DLC '45 West text errata
So, to continue... I see sgocart6298 has already provided some of these. Sgocart6298, I don't think you have to repost those earlier remarks about the style of the 'Oh', or 'Ohh', Kerensky should have decided on using any alternative or not, and most stylistical 'errata' that remain are simply a matter of taste.
Although if any clear grammatical errors or misspellings remain you could repost those, but the stylistical stuff is ultimately the domain of the devs. I've learned that if there are any stylistical issues I have doubts about, but they are not truly 'wrong', I let them be. Seems to be working fine so far. And I make mistakes too, as has been demonstrated earlier... That's why it's a good idea to have more people checking the texts. So thanks for taking the time to post here.
SEALION45
SeaLion45.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“The tables on turned on the Western Allies as the German launch their own cross channel invasion!”
The tables are turned on the Western Allies as the Germans launch their own cross channel invasion!
IDS_STRING54
“Aberystwth”
Aberystwyth (I only know this because I got a postcard from there once...)
IDS_MESSAGE0
“Additional V1s units are now at your disposal, use them wisely.”
Additional V1 units are now at your disposal, use them wisely.
Sealion45A.pzbrf
“You're going to need them to, because not only are American and British naval assets going to challenge your invasion,“
You're going to need them too, because not only are American and British naval assets going to challenge your invasion,
And to make my post suitably ironic, I spotted a stylistical issue... Kamerer already mentioned the 'England' vs '(Great) Britain' issue, because I'm neither American nor British I won't take a stand, but I simply want to point out that the briefing files use the terms interchangingly, and that seems really inconsistent. My advice would be to choose one and use it everywhere. Some examples taken from various briefing files:
“Your objective is to conquer England by securing ALL Allied flag hexes."
“U-boat fleets to join in your invasion of Britain.”
“but even now American reinforcements are steaming to England from the Atlantic.”
Sealion45B_decisive.pzbrf
“Now alone against a revitalized and technologically advanced Germany, Soviet Russia proved unable to overcome their adversary.”
Now alone against a revitalized and technologically advanced Germany, the Soviet Union proved unable to overcome their adversary.
“There might even be cool game about it someday!”
There might even be a cool game about it someday!
Although if any clear grammatical errors or misspellings remain you could repost those, but the stylistical stuff is ultimately the domain of the devs. I've learned that if there are any stylistical issues I have doubts about, but they are not truly 'wrong', I let them be. Seems to be working fine so far. And I make mistakes too, as has been demonstrated earlier... That's why it's a good idea to have more people checking the texts. So thanks for taking the time to post here.
SEALION45
SeaLion45.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“The tables on turned on the Western Allies as the German launch their own cross channel invasion!”
The tables are turned on the Western Allies as the Germans launch their own cross channel invasion!
IDS_STRING54
“Aberystwth”
Aberystwyth (I only know this because I got a postcard from there once...)
IDS_MESSAGE0
“Additional V1s units are now at your disposal, use them wisely.”
Additional V1 units are now at your disposal, use them wisely.
Sealion45A.pzbrf
“You're going to need them to, because not only are American and British naval assets going to challenge your invasion,“
You're going to need them too, because not only are American and British naval assets going to challenge your invasion,
And to make my post suitably ironic, I spotted a stylistical issue... Kamerer already mentioned the 'England' vs '(Great) Britain' issue, because I'm neither American nor British I won't take a stand, but I simply want to point out that the briefing files use the terms interchangingly, and that seems really inconsistent. My advice would be to choose one and use it everywhere. Some examples taken from various briefing files:
“Your objective is to conquer England by securing ALL Allied flag hexes."
“U-boat fleets to join in your invasion of Britain.”
“but even now American reinforcements are steaming to England from the Atlantic.”
Sealion45B_decisive.pzbrf
“Now alone against a revitalized and technologically advanced Germany, Soviet Russia proved unable to overcome their adversary.”
Now alone against a revitalized and technologically advanced Germany, the Soviet Union proved unable to overcome their adversary.
“There might even be cool game about it someday!”
There might even be a cool game about it someday!
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Nordwind
Nordwind.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“Attempting to bolster the failing operaton in the Ardennes, Germany launched an attack aimed at Strasbourg”
Attempting to bolster the failing operation in the Ardennes, Germany launched an attack aimed at Strasbourg
Nordwind.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“Attempting to bolster the failing operaton in the Ardennes, Germany launched an attack aimed at Strasbourg”
Attempting to bolster the failing operation in the Ardennes, Germany launched an attack aimed at Strasbourg
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Colmar Pocket
Colmar PocketA.pzbrf
“January 20th, 1944”
January 20th, 1945
Colmar PocketA.pzbrf
“January 20th, 1944”
January 20th, 1945
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Ruhr Pocket
Ruhr Pocket.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_AXIS_CAM_OBJECTIVES
“Disable Ludendorff Bridge before 15 Allied units escape off map.”
Disable Ludendorff Bridge before 15 Allied units escape off the map
(or, to be more consistent with the scenario messages:) Disable Ludendorff Bridge before 15 Allied units escape off the board
IDS_MESSAGE7
“The first Allied unit has escaped off board!”
The first Allied unit has escaped off the board!
IDS_MESSAGE8
“Almost enough Allied units have escaped off board. You must find a way to stop them!”
Almost enough Allied units have escaped off the board. You must find a way to stop them!
Ruhr PocketA.pzbrf
“Your objective is to hold destroy the Ludendorff Bridge”
Your objective is to destroy the Ludendorff Bridge
Ruhr PocketB_decisive.pzbrf
“I'm certain we haven't see the last challenge to our control”
I'm certain we haven't seen the last challenge to our control
Ruhr Pocket.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_AXIS_CAM_OBJECTIVES
“Disable Ludendorff Bridge before 15 Allied units escape off map.”
Disable Ludendorff Bridge before 15 Allied units escape off the map
(or, to be more consistent with the scenario messages:) Disable Ludendorff Bridge before 15 Allied units escape off the board
IDS_MESSAGE7
“The first Allied unit has escaped off board!”
The first Allied unit has escaped off the board!
IDS_MESSAGE8
“Almost enough Allied units have escaped off board. You must find a way to stop them!”
Almost enough Allied units have escaped off the board. You must find a way to stop them!
Ruhr PocketA.pzbrf
“Your objective is to hold destroy the Ludendorff Bridge”
Your objective is to destroy the Ludendorff Bridge
Ruhr PocketB_decisive.pzbrf
“I'm certain we haven't see the last challenge to our control”
I'm certain we haven't seen the last challenge to our control
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Wesel
Wesel.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“Operation Varsity airdrops British and Americans forces to secure crossings over the Rhine River”
Operation Varsity airdrops British and American forces to secure crossings over the Rhine River
WeselB_decisive.pzbrf
“Once again you have foiled our enemy's plan to across the Rhine”
Once again you have foiled our enemy's plan to cross the Rhine
WeselC_marginal.pzbrf
"Once again you have blunted our enemy's plan to across the Rhine"
Once again you have blunted our enemy's plan to cross the Rhine
"I'm afraid this half success is the only bit of good news"
I'm afraid this half-success is the only bit of good news
Wesel.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
“Operation Varsity airdrops British and Americans forces to secure crossings over the Rhine River”
Operation Varsity airdrops British and American forces to secure crossings over the Rhine River
WeselB_decisive.pzbrf
“Once again you have foiled our enemy's plan to across the Rhine”
Once again you have foiled our enemy's plan to cross the Rhine
WeselC_marginal.pzbrf
"Once again you have blunted our enemy's plan to across the Rhine"
Once again you have blunted our enemy's plan to cross the Rhine
"I'm afraid this half success is the only bit of good news"
I'm afraid this half-success is the only bit of good news
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End on the Elbe
The End on the Elbe.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
American and Russians forces meet for the first time near the Elbe
American and Soviet forces meet for the first time near the Elbe
IDS_STRING49
Falkenhein
Falkenhain
End on the ElbeA.pzbrf
“Your objective is prevent the Americans and Soviet forces from linking together.”
Your objective is to prevent the American and Soviet forces from linking together.
The End on the Elbe.pzloc
IDS_SCEN_DESCRIPTION
American and Russians forces meet for the first time near the Elbe
American and Soviet forces meet for the first time near the Elbe
IDS_STRING49
Falkenhein
Falkenhain
End on the ElbeA.pzbrf
“Your objective is prevent the Americans and Soviet forces from linking together.”
Your objective is to prevent the American and Soviet forces from linking together.
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Elsenborn ridge
Elsenborn Ridge.pzloc
IDS_STRING24
Wahlerscheld
Wahlerscheid
IDS_STRING38
Buchholz Sta
Buchholz Station
IDS_STRING40
Hergenvnn
Hergenvenn
Elsenborn RidgeA.pzbrf
“control all the major road ways in this area”
control all the major roadways in this area
“Your objective is capture all Victory Hexes”
Your objective is to capture all Victory Hexes
Elsenborn Ridge.pzloc
IDS_STRING24
Wahlerscheld
Wahlerscheid
IDS_STRING38
Buchholz Sta
Buchholz Station
IDS_STRING40
Hergenvnn
Hergenvenn
Elsenborn RidgeA.pzbrf
“control all the major road ways in this area”
control all the major roadways in this area
“Your objective is capture all Victory Hexes”
Your objective is to capture all Victory Hexes
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La Gleize
La Gleize.pzloc
IDS_STRING28
Trois Ponts
Trois-Ponts
La Gleize.pzloc
IDS_STRING28
Trois Ponts
Trois-Ponts
Re: DLC '45 West text errata
All issues above this post should be correct now, as always thanks for your diligence and proofreading!
As ThVN stated, yes ultimately we do exercise our authority when it comes to a question of style. Of course we want to fix things that are incorrect, but simply 'better' in the eyes of a few isn't necessarily the best answer either.
As for Sealion 45, I think its understood that 'England' is the country and 'Britain' (Great Britain) is the actual island. To make this more clear, the A briefing has been altered slightly, but still uses both terms.
<p><b>July 18th, 1945</b></p>
<p>No one believed we could accomplish all that we have, but here we are Herr General. Once again we stand on the banks of the English Channel! Thanks to your efforts thus far, both in halting the Soviets in the East and liberating vast quantities of supplies and transports from the British and Americans, we have the perfect opportunity to end the war on the West Front with an invasion of our own!</p>
<p><b>Your objective is to conquer England by securing ALL Allied flag hexes.</b></p>
<p>With our sudden reversal of fortunes, I've even been able to procure the remnants of our surface and U-boat fleets to join in your invasion of Great Britain. I'm certain you will find their assistance critical to fight off major American and British naval assets challenging your invasion. Should you emerge victorious against the Allied battle fleets, I strongly urge you to intercept any reinforcements steaming towards Great Britain from the Atlantic to the west.</p>
<p>As a warning, you should expect extremely fierce resistance from the British on their homeland, and you may even have some trouble establishing a proper beachhead. To assist you in this, I have placed numerous V weapons at your disposal, and more are on the way. This will likely be the final battle, so don't be shy about using these weapons to the last!</p>
<p>Good luck, Herr General. We stand on the brink of Germany's greatest victory and our only chance to end this war on favorable terms!</p>
1. English Channel... obviously not British Channel.
2. England. Goal is to conquer/defeat the country, a geopolitical entity.
3. Invasion of Great Britain. Invasion of the island, a geographic location.
4. Steaming towards Great Britain. Moving from the Atlantic towards the geographical location of the island.
As ThVN stated, yes ultimately we do exercise our authority when it comes to a question of style. Of course we want to fix things that are incorrect, but simply 'better' in the eyes of a few isn't necessarily the best answer either.
As for Sealion 45, I think its understood that 'England' is the country and 'Britain' (Great Britain) is the actual island. To make this more clear, the A briefing has been altered slightly, but still uses both terms.
<p><b>July 18th, 1945</b></p>
<p>No one believed we could accomplish all that we have, but here we are Herr General. Once again we stand on the banks of the English Channel! Thanks to your efforts thus far, both in halting the Soviets in the East and liberating vast quantities of supplies and transports from the British and Americans, we have the perfect opportunity to end the war on the West Front with an invasion of our own!</p>
<p><b>Your objective is to conquer England by securing ALL Allied flag hexes.</b></p>
<p>With our sudden reversal of fortunes, I've even been able to procure the remnants of our surface and U-boat fleets to join in your invasion of Great Britain. I'm certain you will find their assistance critical to fight off major American and British naval assets challenging your invasion. Should you emerge victorious against the Allied battle fleets, I strongly urge you to intercept any reinforcements steaming towards Great Britain from the Atlantic to the west.</p>
<p>As a warning, you should expect extremely fierce resistance from the British on their homeland, and you may even have some trouble establishing a proper beachhead. To assist you in this, I have placed numerous V weapons at your disposal, and more are on the way. This will likely be the final battle, so don't be shy about using these weapons to the last!</p>
<p>Good luck, Herr General. We stand on the brink of Germany's greatest victory and our only chance to end this war on favorable terms!</p>
1. English Channel... obviously not British Channel.
2. England. Goal is to conquer/defeat the country, a geopolitical entity.
3. Invasion of Great Britain. Invasion of the island, a geographic location.
4. Steaming towards Great Britain. Moving from the Atlantic towards the geographical location of the island.
Re: DLC '45 West text errata
Kudos for doing the text work, ThvN and sgocart6298. I would also like to point out that the Panzer Corps team significantly improved the briefings just like they continued to improve the game mechanics of Panzer Corps. I really appreciate that.
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Re: DLC '45 West text errata
Thank You LongascLongasc wrote:Kudos for doing the text work, ThvN and sgocart6298. I would also like to point out that the Panzer Corps team significantly improved the briefings just like they continued to improve the game mechanics of Panzer Corps. I really appreciate that.
