Slitherine

Please post any textual errors if you come across any. I'll try to proofread as much as I can but English is not my native language so any help is welcome.

St. Vith

St. VithA.pzbrf

"…High Command has taken great pains to ensure the success of Operation Watch am Rhein!"

…High Command has taken great pains to ensure the success of Operation Wacht am Rhein!


"Enemy resistance should be fairly light, given the pains we took to hide our build up in the Ardennes…"

Enemy resistance should be fairly light, given the pains we took to hide our buildup in the Ardennes…


St. VithC_marginal.pzbrf

"I believe we might just make it to Antwerp afterall!"

I believe we might just make it to Antwerp after all!


St. VithD_loss.pzbrf

"You are ordered to Berlin to report for your failings..."

You are ordered to Berlin to report on your failings... (or: You are ordered to Berlin to account for your failings...)

Re: DLC '45 West #13: Liege

Postby sgocart6298 » 12 Jan 2013 20:20
Liege Narrative:


...The significant of this, you ask?....

better: ...The significance of this you ask?....

Also,
...With the skies clearing, you can expect regular interference from allied airpower, [thought]....

Spelling: though


Also,

...To help you against the enemy's aircraft [though,] I've dispatched....

better,

...To help you against the enemy's aircraft, I've dispatched....

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Re: DLC '45 West #07: Bastogne Assault

Postby sgocart6298 » 12 Jan 2013 17:09
The Communique to Commander:

"What is this? I don't understand. Radioman, (better with exclamation, ie, as in

Radioman! as if shouting?)

Also, Ohh these imprudent Americans.... (better with exclamation as in

Oh! These imprudent Americans....

Also, We know the Allies armored reinforcements are already enroute....

(better with Allied instead of Allies)

Re: DLC '45 West #07: Bastogne Assault

Postby sgocart6298 » 12 Jan 2013 20:05
Post Game End Note to Bastogne.


On one hand, our path to Antwerp had never looked more open than it does.
However, with the weather....

Better: On one hand, our path to Antwerp has never looked more open than it does now,
however, with the weather.

Re: DLC '45 West #05: Celles

Postby sgocart6298 » 12 Jan 2013 15:28

Spelling Error:
"Historically, the town of Celle marked the absolute farthest westward penetration of
[Germany] forces during the Battle of the Bulge."

Should be German

Houffalize

HouffalizeA.pzbrf
"It is here that we expect to make the furthest advances the American lines,"

It is here that we expect to make the furthest advances towards the American lines,


"Control of the bridges and crossings in this region are vital "

Control of the bridges and crossings in this region is vital


"you should rest assured that Allied bombers is still not a concern to worry about!"

you should rest assured that Allied bombers are still not a concern to worry about!


HouffalizeB_decisive.pzbrf
"With these bridge secure and intact"

With these bridges secure and intact


"I trust that your abilities will overcome and obstacles you encounter!"

I trust that your abilities will overcome any obstacles you encounter!


HouffalizeC_marginal.pzbrf
"With enough bridge secures, our advance can continue as planned."

With enough bridges secure, our advance can continue as planned.


"I trust that your abilities will overcome and obstacles you encounter!"

I trust that your abilities will overcome any obstacles you encounter!

Celles

CellesB_decisive.pzbrf and CellesC_marginal.pzbrf

“Historically, the town of Celles marked the absolute furthest westward penetration of Germany forces during the Battle of the Bulge.”

Historically, the town of Celles marked the absolute furthest westward penetration of German forces during the Battle of the Bulge.

Bastogne siege

Bastogne SiegeA.pzbrf

“escort all 10 V Weapons Units to old launch sites in the region.”

escort all 10 V Weapon Units to old launch sites in the region.


“moved by their SdKfz 7transports.”

moved by their SdKfz 7 transports.


Bastogne SiegeD_loss.pzbrf

“Without an ability to neutralize or bypass this key positions in the Ardennes, our drive on Antwerp is doomed to failure.”

Without an ability to neutralize or bypass this key position in the Ardennes, our drive on Antwerp is doomed to fail.

Post Antwerp Information

Historically. the German advance never come close to Antwerp.

Better: came

Gates of Berlin

Begin Communication

Herr General. I hope this message finds you and your forces for battle....

Better: Herr General. I hope this message finds you and your forces ready for battle....

Also,

...as I am dire need

Better ...as I am in dire need

Post Antwerp Note


...The Americans are finally showing signs of materiol exhaustion...

Spelling: material

Bastogne assault

Bastogne AssaultA.pzbrf

“We know that Allies armored reinforcements are already enroute...”

We know that Allied armored reinforcements are already enroute


Bastogne AssaultB_decisive.pzbrf

“...their only major relief force for dozens of kilometers have been utterly crushed...”

their only major relief force for dozens of kilometers has been utterly crushed


Bastogne AssaultD_loss.pzbrf

“Without an ability to neutralize or bypass this key positions in the Ardennes, our drive on Antwerp is doomed to failure.”

Without an ability to neutralize or bypass this key position in the Ardennes, our drive on Antwerp is doomed to fail.

Liege

LiegeA.pzbrf

The date mentioned in the briefing, January 2nd, 1945, is off because the scenario actually starts on the 1st of January.

“The significant of this, you ask?”

The significance of this, you ask?


“…thought the ground is still heavily laden with snow.”

though the ground is still heavily laden with snow.


LiegeB_decisive.pzbrf

“and the Gotha-229 never saw action against Allied forces”

and the Gotha Go 229 never saw action against Allied forces

Antwerp

AntwerpA.pzbrf

“Between you and your victory stands a significant build up of British forces”

Between you and your victory stands a significant buildup of British forces


AntwerpB_decisive.pzbrf

“Operation Watch am Rhein”

Operation Wacht am Rhein


“Now that we have these supplies, our situation will be completely reserved and at great cost to our enemies!”

Now that we have these supplies, our situation will be completely reversed and at great cost to our enemies!


“Historically, the German advance never come close to Antwerp.”

Historically, the German advance never came close to Antwerp.


AntwerpC_marginal.pzbrf and AntwerpD_loss.pzbrf

“Had it done so, not only would vast quantities of fuel and other supplies been captured,”

Had it done so, not only would vast quantities of fuel and other supplies have been captured,

As always, thanks for your help in double checking the text. All issues above this post should be resolved in the following BETA!

With a few exceptions. 'For your failings' and 'doomed to failure' aren't incorrect.

Kerensky wrote:'For your failings' and 'doomed to failure' aren't incorrect.

You're right, oops, sorry! Thanks for this, it will help me in preventing to post such 'errata' in the future.

St. Vith December 16, 1944

Opening Orders:

"To help you overcome these positions, we've got a new weapon for your use."


Better: we have (in our possession)

(although we've got is an informal way of saying we have).

So, to continue with beta2:

Brussels

BrusselsA.pzbrf

"The Allies have finally scrapped enough strength"

The Allies have finally scraped together enough strength


BrusselsB_decisive.pzbrf

"and their trapped and staving forces are surrendering by the thousands!"

and their trapped and starving forces are surrendering by the thousands!

Gates of Berlin

Gates of BerlinA.pzbrf

“and my position here at Leebus is seriously compromised.”

and my position here at Lebus is seriously compromised.

Dunkirk45

Dunkirk45B_decisive.pzbrf

“The Americans and British forces on the continent”

The American and British forces on the continent


“we will probably never had a better opportunity”

we will probably never have a better opportunity


Scenario message, the warning for the Allied counterattack:

“Brace for iminent enemy contact!”

Brace for imminent enemy contact!