Slitherine

Just like last time, load up this thread with misspellings or grammatical issues.
Thank you!

Belgrade:
Map: Zero
Briefing: "I, as your Generalfeldmarschall, ..." just say "As your Generalfeldmarshall"
Debriefing: "poised" to "are poised" - but hey, don't always say "poised". This word is poisoned, just say "will". It sounds much more confident and worthy of a German GFM

Metaxas Line:
Map: Serrai - Serres? Thessalonika could be Thessaloniki, don't know what English speakers prefer.

Θεσσαλονίκη works for me.

It's all Greek to me.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Greek_to_me

In the Belgrade briefing, where it says, "...the Capitol of Belgrade..." the word "capitol" should be "capital" and the "c" is lowercase.

I did think a couple parts of the Belgrade were somewhat awkwardly worded, like "our upcoming massive campaign in the east", I think tweaking that just a bit to "our massive upcoming campaign" sounds better.

I also concur with Longsac that a recommended tweak would be "As your general-feldmarschall, I will keep you informed of your objectives and share information with you as it becomes available during these briefings."

Longasc wrote:Metaxas Line:
Map: Serrai - Serres? Thessalonika could be Thessaloniki, don't know what English speakers prefer.

In the US it is commonly referred to as Thessalonika or sometimes Thessalonica and even Thessaloniki.

The briefing for Barbarossa has a reference to 'the Minsk'.

Mission 3 Airborne Crete Briefing

"Operation Mercury is to proceeding at full pace, Herr General"

Should be "Operation Mercury is proceeding at full pace, Herr General"

Minsk 41:

Unit "Karl-Gerat" -> "Karl-Gerät".
There is an "ä" in Gerät (German for device/machine)
The same applies for the Karl-Gerät in "Barbarossa" in the original campaign.

Kiev:

"This should your forces away from Kiev."

Metaxas Line post-mission briefing: Where it says, "...the Metaxas line..." should read Metaxas Line.

Airborne Crete briefing: In the the last paragraph, where it says, "...a few formations has been..." "has" should be "have."

In the Metaxas Line scenario, hex 27.14 is labeled as thick swamp; it should be labeled Nestos Potamos River.

I think dshaw62197 should take a look at the "Kiev" Briefing. There seem to be several grammar issues and the way it is phrased is also strange.
The impression I got is that the GFM is reporting to the Führer in Berlin and ordered his secretary to give me orders.

I am not sure if this really works, it's very odd.
For text related errors posting the text or screenshots of the briefing text at least here will be helpful:

dshaw62197 wrote:In the Metaxas Line scenario, hex 27.14 is labeled as thick swamp; it should be labeled Nestos Potamos River.

Not to spoil you things, but thick swamp and thick forest are usually special hexes that cannot be entered used to spawn "captured" units. I guess you found aunt Matilda.

I just tried to send dshaw62197 a private message asking him as native speaker to take a look at the DLC Briefing, but somehow the forum PM's don't work right now.

My suggestion would be to post screenshots of the briefing and debriefing texts here and let people rephrase/correct them. That might be more efficient and allow people to come up with better proposals. We might also spot mistakes we missed later.

After getting decisive victory at Vzama, there is text that reads "the general-feldmarshall was hopefully bogged down", which doesn't make a lot of sense.

And then in the text for the advance into Moscow "extremely well fortification".

Not to spoil you things, but thick swamp and thick forest are usually special hexes that cannot be entered used to spawn "captured" units. I guess you found aunt Matilda.

Well what do you know! I KNEW there had to be a bonus unit down at that city. Thanks for clearing that up, Longasc! Although hopefully in the future these tiles can be named something less obvious so players won't "find" them so easily.

As for the Kiev briefing, I'll give it a good look once I reach that scenario. I will definitely keep your suggestions in mind.

Don't worry, there are units hidden in cities where there are no thick swamps/forests or unusual hexes nearby. The other giveaway is that if the city is far away and paratroopers or overstrength infantry units are inside you should definitely investigate that.

Longasc wrote:Don't worry, there are units hidden in cities where there are no thick swamps/forests or unusual hexes nearby. The other giveaway is that if the city is far away and paratroopers or overstrength infantry units are inside you should definitely investigate that.

I would say this is the right idea. See something abnormal? Investigate it. You might be rewarded for your efforts.
I didn't want to make capturing enemy units insidious (have 3 units in hexes X, Y, and Z all at the same time, and ONLY on turn 5) They exist to be found, not for people to start placing units on every single hex on every single map in an attempt to stumble upon them.