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uran21 wrote:Brevity

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Generalleutnant enemy gives up from some of his mission objectives and withdraws.
For sure they don't want to be caught in the open.

'Generalleutnant.
The enemy offensive has stalled and they are retreating.'

Keeps it simple and leaves options open to the player.
Unless you wish to overtly encourage the player to go on the offensive?

Balla.

Regarding Suez - "Sunk the Royal Navy ships! Sunk them all!" It should be "Sink the Royal Navy ships! Sink them all!"

uran21 wrote:Battleaxe

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Generalleutnant, we have received intelligence of advancing mobile formations approaching our flank from the desert!

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We must make sure that Sidi Aziz stays in our hands. An enemy presence there could crush our defenses.

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It is imperative that this diversion group be eliminated in it's entirety.

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New equipment has been captured.

On the first message, I think it would be better as:

'Generalleutnant, we have received intelligence of an advancing enemy column from the West!'

and the second:


'It is essential that Sidi Aziz is held. An enemy presence there would compromise our defences.'

Balla.

Some messages are edited and there is new addition on Dash to the Wire.

Longasc wrote:

uran21 wrote:Second offensive

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Retreat to El Agheila, be warned British could try to cut off the advance!

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Reinforcements have arrived!

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Push your forces into offensive and retake lost ground!

Retreat to El Agheila, be warned that the British could try to cut off your advance!

(Note: I have not played this scenario yet. How can the British cut off the advance if the player is actually retreating?)

'Retreat to El Agheila, but be prepared for interception by British troops.'

Balla.

uran21 wrote:Malta

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New equipment has been acquired.

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We have received reports indicating a strong naval presence of the enemy.

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Intelligence reports that the convoy is trying to leave the area! Prevent their escape, locate and sink the convoy!

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High Command rewarded your efforts in sunking Allied fleet with more resources.

'High Command has sent you additional resources in appreciation of your efforts in sinking the Allied fleet.'

Balla.

uran21 wrote:Alam Halfa

Not sure if this is the place for this but...The MV conditions state "Hold 2 Italian held objectives and capture ALL least 4 enemy held objectives."
Should be AT least 4

uran21 wrote:Malta

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New equipment has been acquired.

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We have received reports indicating a strong naval presence of the enemy.

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Intelligence reports that the convoy is trying to leave the area! Prevent their escape, locate and sink the convoy!

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High Command has sent you additional resources in appreciation of your efforts in sinking the Allied fleet.

Item 2 would be better:

'We have received reports of a strong enemy naval presence in the area.'

Balla.

Persia

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Intelligence reports the movement of enemy landing craft through the Caspian Sea.

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Intelligence reports that the enemy is mounting an effort to cross the Tigris river.

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We have lost contact with some of our air patrols that were deep into enemy airspace.

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We have reestablished contact with the local air patrol! They are feeding us reconnaissance data on enemy movement.



Caucasus

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High Command demands that you place the German banner over Mount Elbrus!

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The strategic situation has forced Turkey to accept German hegemony in this region and it is now willing to provide a naval supply corridor through the Bosporus straits and Dardanelles. To make use of this we must take control of a Black Sea port. Sochi should work nicely for these purposes.

El Alamein

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If the situation deteriorates, your units can safely leave the battlefield through the marked corridor.







Mareth Line

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The enemy has launched an unexpected attack on our flank!

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Our mechanics have restored a British tank left on the battlefield.



Tunisian Bridgehead

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The enemy naval presence is too strong, supply by sea has no chance for success!

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Since supplying your forces by sea has been ruled out, aircraft will bring equipment and resources. Guard them well!

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We are expecting an air supply convoy soon. Land it at the marked zone near Bizerte.

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We are expecting an air supply convoy soon. Land it at the marked zone near Mateur.

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We are expecting an air supply convoy soon. Land it at the marked zone near Djedeida.

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We are expecting an air supply convoy soon. Land it at the marked zone near Tunis.

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Air supply convoy is in range, commit an escort to it.

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The Gigants are bringing us reinforcements!

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Air supply is entering our zone. Ensure that one of your fighters is assigned to defend it.

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Resources to continue the fight have reached the bridgehead.

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Resources to continue the fight have reached the bridgehead.

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Resources to continue the fight have reached the bridgehead.

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Resources to continue the fight have reached the bridgehead.

Thank you very much. Some things changed, new things added.

Introductory message on first scenario of campaign ( Beta4 )

Typo 'Greatings....' should read 'Greetings...'

Although that is strange in English usage.

'Good Morning' or 'Good Afternoon' would read smoother.

Balla

Not really a typo, but I read somewhere on the forum that it was 'General Paulus' without a 'von'.

'Von' appears in the briefing to Battleaxe Beta4

Balla.

Here is my take on the last round of in-game messages.

East Africa

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The enemy may launch a counter-offensive with the intentions of capturing Berbera. Protect this vital port!

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Intelligence reports tell us that there are Italian prisoners being held in Nairobi. Commando Supremo will undoubtedly reward you with additional resources if you manage to release the prisoners.

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Commando Supremo has awarded you with 1000 prestige for releasing the Italian prisoners.





On Road to India

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The enemy diversion has succeeded in capturing some of our possessions. It is imperative that they be retaken!

Last but not least:

British India

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Intelligence reports tell us that the enemy's main headquarters is located somewhere behind the Eastern Ghats mountains.

Brevity message error:

1) Turn 8 - should be "its entirety" not "it's entirety."
2) See the post above (top of this page) from ballacraine re: turn 6 message. It is still poorly worded. his suggestion sounds fine.

uran21 wrote:Second offensive

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Retreat to El Agheila, be warned that the British could try to cut off your advance!

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Reinforcements have arrived!

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Push your forces into offensive and retake lost ground!

'Retreat to El Agheila, be warned that the British could try to cut off your advance!'

This would probably be better.

'Retreat to El Agheila. Be aware that the British will attempt to cut off your withdrawal.'

Balla.

Beta 4 - messages appearing twice

I am getting some messages twice:

1) In Second Offensive, "Reinforcements have arrived" appeared with the units at turn 19. Then again at the start of turn 20.
2) In Gazala, "You have captured new equipment" appeared with the Sherman at turn 12, then again at the start of the next turn 13.

Neither message appeared in the message log (but I think that's correct? Not an instruction/order).

Tobruk message appearing during AIs turn was separate case which was adjusted but I do not know what causes this double appearance of certain messages.

Regarding Brevity message. Sidi Aziz is removed from victory hexes and this should be told to the player on some way like Allied forces are giving up from their own mission objectives. Reason for this is they do not want to be caught in the open when they encounter advancing players core. This is some kind of encounter scenario with high offensive activity from Allies at start which changes to Axis offensive activity. So if anyone has better alternative that has elements of giving up from mission objectives by Allies and the reason for it to be they do not want to be caught in the open feel free to propose it. Current message goes like this: "Generalleutnant enemy gives up from some of his mission objectives and withdraws. For sure they don't want to be caught in the open."